Friday Fictioneers – January 17, 2018
Using the photo prompt above submitted by J Hardy Carroll, write a flash fiction that is 100 words or less.
Funland
They were closing down the old amusement park. As children, my twin sister and I would spend all our chore money there. When we were old enough, we both got a job there. We looked forward to our time in the amusement park until the last year before we went off to college.
You would think this would make me feel nostalgic or maybe even sad. Instead, it only brought me fear. No one knows what happened on our last summer at Funland and we wanted it to stay that way. That body would be completely decomposed by now. (99 words)
Writing In The Deep 
39 responses to “Flash Fiction: Funland”
Oh goodness. Murder by twins? This would make a great intro for a thriller 🙂
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I am always interested in good thrillers and unexpected endings.
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Murdered by your twin? Yikes. Nice twist.
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The more I write for fun, the more I love to write stories with a good twist.
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I literally was thinking “where is the rest? Why can’t there be the rest?!” I like it a lot! Would make a good opening for a short thriller story.
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Thank you. I love to write short stories with a twist. In the past, I wrote one where so many people wanted more, so I had to write another flash fiction as a part two.
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hopefully that will be the case this time as well!
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You never know.
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Dear Heather,
A bit of a mystery. Wonder what the victim did to deserve such a fate? Nicely done.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Thanks. Some of the best stories leave you with so many questions. Sometimes its better to be left with your own imagination instead of knowing the truth.
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Twins, always something a little sinister about them, especially identical twins! Great story 🙂
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Ever since The Shining identical twins have been seen as creepy and it is fun to use that as a good writing tool.
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Clearly and fluently written. I was interested that the main characters were twin sisters. From the voice of the narrator I would have guessed male, although I’m not sure why.
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Thank you. I like to write for male characters a lot. I saw this one as more interesting if the twins were supposed to be sweet innocent girls. No one would have ever suspected them to do something so horrible.
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I didn’t see that coming! Brilliant
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Ha ha ha ha. The Killer Twins. Loved that ending!
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The ending blew me off.. nice twist
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Killer twins. Double trouble, I guess.
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Spooky but a fascinating read! Unexpected…you know how to delight your readers! Kudos 🙂
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Thank you. I love to delight with a good twist
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Everyone is quick to say murder… it could have been an innocent accident… right?
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It could have been. It could have been self defense as well. It leaves it open to interpretation.
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Which is great!
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We know what you did last summer… 🙂
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The body may be decomposed but the bones won’t. What happens when the land is redeveloped?
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Exactly. That is why the main character was scared.
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Chilling! I’ve always found funfairs a bit spooky, in spite of the fun…
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I was actually thinking an accident where those twins were to blame… bad enough … I wonder who the body was
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Good stories can be interpreted in many different ways. I am glad that it left you wondering who it could be and what actually happened.
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Makes me wonder what all happened on that fateful summer day at. I’m thinking a drugged up vodka drinking carnie is still missing.
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Carnies are very creepy people. It could be.
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Oh goodness! I wasn’t expecting that twist ending! Well done.
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Thank you. I am partial to a good twist at the end.
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Well, thanks a lot for that cliffhanger! Shall I come back next week? Good one.
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I like a good twist or cliff hanger. A few times I have written a second story to answer some questions. If you read How Droll, it was left with such a cliff hanger that I had to write the next part.
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Wow I didnt see that ending coming! Really sweet nostalgic piece and then bam! the killer(!) last line, This is my favourite FriFic of the week I think 🙂
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Thank you so much. That means a lot to me.
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🙂
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